Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'd like to ask for a couple of revisions.

Firstly we'd like some expansion on the personality section as it is very brief. Secondly, we'd also like to request a revision of the First Person Sample as currently it seems very reliant on action and doesn't give us much of an idea of the character from the words spoken.

We're also not sure whether the bolded text throughout was intentional, but it does make it a little difficult to read.

Please let us know if you have any questions.