Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need some revisions and a clarification.
The wikia link only goes to the wikia itself and not the character's entry.
Network sample needs more added as we can't really get a sense of his voice. In terms with shy/quiet characters, there are other ways to get around the limitations of that character type. Such as him not realizing that he's being recorded and having him say/do things he wouldn't normally do around strangers, but would say to himself.
The link in the third person sample doesn't work, but TDM links can only be used for network samples and only if they are in a network type style (action spam). Also your written third person sample is too short as it's only 228 words.
We would like clarification on his abilities. Does he actually have powers or not? The two sentences "Adam doesn't really have any 'powers' more than any normal person would have." and "Because he has spent time learning and practicing he has a stronger psychic ability and thus has learned to separate his mind and his body." contradict each other so we're confused about that part. What is his relationship to the powers, regardless if he has any or not? If he does have powers, are they simply not as strong as most others with said powers?
Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.
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The wikia link only goes to the wikia itself and not the character's entry.
Network sample needs more added as we can't really get a sense of his voice. In terms with shy/quiet characters, there are other ways to get around the limitations of that character type. Such as him not realizing that he's being recorded and having him say/do things he wouldn't normally do around strangers, but would say to himself.
The link in the third person sample doesn't work, but TDM links can only be used for network samples and only if they are in a network type style (action spam). Also your written third person sample is too short as it's only 228 words.
We would like clarification on his abilities. Does he actually have powers or not? The two sentences "Adam doesn't really have any 'powers' more than any normal person would have." and "Because he has spent time learning and practicing he has a stronger psychic ability and thus has learned to separate his mind and his body." contradict each other so we're confused about that part. What is his relationship to the powers, regardless if he has any or not? If he does have powers, are they simply not as strong as most others with said powers?
Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.