Applications (Ver. 3)

[thewakemods]

** APPLICATIONS ARE CLOSED.**


Update: We are now allowing an option for those who have been here before that wish to return for endgame, instead of filling the normal apps, instead you can just fill a new form below.

Old Characters
Name: Character name and journal: Ascension rank they were previously: Were they a Wakened, Angelii, or Ashura? When they were in game/notes: (Can put a link to any old activity, their Wake Wiki page, or summarize.)

Comments are no longer screened. Please let us know if you'd like us to screen your application by writing 'Please Screen' in the Subject Line. (ie: Character Name | Series Name | Please Screen) Feel free to post as many comments as necessary or provide a link to your journal post.

Fandom Character Applications:
<b><u>Personal Information</b></u> <b>Name</b>: <b>Age</b>: <b>Personal Journal</b>: <b>Email / Plurk / Discord / Other</b>: <b>Current Character(s):</b> (List the characters you currently play in the Wake, if applicable!) <b><u>Character Information</b></u> <b>Character Name</b>: <b>Fandom</b>: <b>Character History</b>: You have two options for the history requirement: 1) Write the full history of your character out (especially if your canon is obscure). or 2) Link to a detailed wikia page for your character and provide your own bullet point summary of your character’s history. <b>Character Personality</b>: Please be <i>as detailed as possible</i> so that we have a good picture of the character. What makes this character tick? What are their strengths and weaknesses? Minimum three paragraphs. <b>Powers and Abilities</b>: 'nuff said. <b><u>Samples</u></b> TDM posts (unless it's for Network), links, and examples for posts from other communities are not accepted. <b>Network</b>: Your network sample entry should be made as if your character were posting to a public network, such as Dreamwidth. <u>It does <i>not</i> have to be their first post (ie, "OMG WHERE AM I?!")</u>, but it <i>does</i> have to show that the character is perfectly aware of the fact that this is something that other people are likely to see. Please avoid excessive use of descriptions in [action tags] here, as one would get in video posts - we're looking for your character's voice, the one they use for talking to others. Save the internal monologues for the third person sample. If you use TDM for your network sample it needs to meet the following requirements: * Taken from the Test Drive Meme for The Wake and not any other game * Contains at least 12 comments from the character being applied for * Contains enough material for us to see how the character is like * Has to reflect their first person voice <b>Third Person</b>: 300 word minimum. This is the place to show your character's inner thoughts within the setting. Give us a nice third person narrative of your character doing something, plus how they feel about it. This doesn't have to be blatant "<i>this is what my character is thinking, designated by italics!</i>" but should rather show your character's self via their actions and interactions with their environment.

Original Character Applications - we ask that you be AS DETAILED AS POSSIBLE.
<b><u>Personal Information</b></u> <b>Name</b>: <b>Age</b>: <b>Personal Journal</b>: <b>Email / Plurk / Discord / Other</b>: <b>Current Character(s):</b> (List the characters you currently play in the Wake, if applicable!) <b><u>Character Information</b></u> <b>Name</b>: <b>Age</b>: <b>Appearance</b>: <b>Character history</b>: (minimum 4 paragraphs) As this character is from an original story, please give us a clear picture of where he/she is coming from and the events that shape them to be who they are. Please include any details you think are important to understand this character's background. <b>Personality</b>: (at least 3 paragraphs) Just as with the history, please be detailed in providing a good idea of what sort of character this is, how he/she thinks and acts, etc. Given this is an original character, this section is just as important as the history and should compliment it. <b>Powers and Abilities</b>: Self explanatory. <b>World Summary</b>: (describe their world- is it modern, fantasy, historical, sci-fi, etc? What is the political/social scene like for your character? What in their world is relevant to them? This should be at least two paragraphs) <b><u>Samples</u></b> TDM posts (unless it's for Network), links, and examples for posts from other communities are not accepted. <b>Network</b>: Your network sample should be made as if your character were posting to a public network, such as Dreamwidth. <u>It does <i>not</i> have to be their first post (ie, "OMG WHERE AM I?!")</u>, but it <i>does</i> have to show that the character is perfectly aware of the fact that this is something that other people are likely to see. Please avoid excessive use of descriptions in [action tags] here, as one would get in video posts - we're looking for your character's voice, the one they use for talking to others. Save the internal monologues for the third person sample. If you use TDM for your network sample it needs to meet the following requirements: * Taken from the Test Drive Meme for The Wake and not any other game * Contains at least 12 comments from the character being applied for * Contains enough material for us to see how the character is like * Has to reflect their first person voice <b>Third Person</b>: 300 word minimum. This is the place to show your character's inner thoughts within the setting. Give us a nice third person narrative of your character doing something, plus how they feel about it. This doesn't have to be blatant "<i>this is what my character is thinking, designated by italics!</i>" but should rather show your character's self via their actions and interactions with their environment.


** Please note that applications take at least threetwo mods to review and pass, so response times may vary. We apologize for any delay which may result, as the mods are not guaranteed to be on the same schedule. If we request revisions for your application, you have one week to submit those revisions.

Comments

[thewakemods]

Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need some revisions.

Your network sample feels very stiff and disjointed. As if it's a spattering of different introductions that got combined together with no proper ending to it. We ask that you edit this to make the sample flow better.

The third person sample is too short as it's only 288 words. If you're having trouble with counting out your samples to reach the minimum requirement, we recommend this word counter.

Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.

[treno_nobleman]

Yay! 8DD

[diedthesage]

Journal is this one! Thank you!

[even_if_it_crumbles]

My heart will not change...

[thewakemods]

Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need a minor revision.

In regards to your network sample, the test drive link you provided has posts only in third person. TDM links can only be accepted in network/action spam format, so can you provide a different sample? You don't have to do an introduction post with him/him asking where he is and what's going on.

Also in regards to his ability to turn people into stone, should he get in, it'll either have to be nerf'ed or be on a Will vs Will basis as it has the potential to be game breaking.

Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.

[even_if_it_crumbles]

And same link, updated with the changes.

Marcus Wright | Terminator Salvation: Final Battle

[anewhero]

Personal Information
Name: dark
Age: 31
Personal Journal: anewhero
Email / Plurk / Discord / Other:redscribbles/ Jak/Marcus #4226
Current Character(s): General John Connor

Character Information
Character Name: Marcus Wright
Fandom: Terminator Salvation and Final Battle

Character History: You have two options for the history requirement:
https://terminator.fandom.com/wiki/Marcus_Wright

Character Personality: In reality, Marcus was a criminal on death row when he was executed by “lethal injection” due to crimes of killing his own brother and two cops, spending most of his life in prison. Everything he believed about himself in prison in his life and on the last days of his life, he thought he was worthless and nothing mattered more than people’s own harsh opinions on him as a “monster. However he had an unusual trait about him: Most criminals would be willing to defend themselves, giving excuses. Marcus believed his death was just and the value of other humans had higher worth than himself.

He was ready and willing to give up everything to die. He thought he might make people happy to get rid of him as he gave his body up to Cyberdyne System’s “Project Angel”, run by Dr. Serena Kogan.
He was then turned into a unique mix of Terminator and human better known as a T-Hybrid prototype. He was used as a infiltration unit for Skynet to kill Connor but he broke programming to save Connor’s life.

However, there is more to Marcus instead of a monster who is seen as a killer and nothing more. He had no final words to say on his execution. His own eyes reveal a man looking for another chance to live out his life in the right direction.

When someone meets Marcus, they notice his determination. He is an extremely hard worker and will push through any sense of obstacles to get to a goal. Like they say “This man can move mountains” when he pushes hard enough. He is extremely gutsy and will go above and beyond the call of duty to show his worth to someone. However, his emotions are hurt easily and usually go to an extreme at anything relating to his past especially relating to memories of his dead brother.

However, Marcus is extremely loyal to a fault and does not take betrayal well. He “takes no shit” when it comes to protecting his loved ones and allies. He’s gone to lengths such as stabbing a guy in the knee, being the first man in line to save John Connor and give up his own heart and protecting Blair with a wooden board.

When Marcus takes a leadership position in Final Battle, he is promoted when John Connor is away. He changes for the better as he’s able to lead the Resistance as a high commanding officer to help defeat a common enemy. John Connor’s respect for the common man makes Marcus, not a terminator to him but more than that. Someone who can be trusted for who he is and not for his past mistakes.

Powers and Abilities:
Marcus has regeneration abilities with his skin and his heart. It just takes something light to eat to regenerate the important parts of his body.

Marcus can also lift 2 times a regular human can.

Marcus is possibly the only terminator that can swim.

Marcus can feel pain from fire and psychological pain like a human can.

-Marcus has no idea he’s a terminator but accepts he’s more human-like than most terminators.

-Marcus’s weaknesses are that he has a major flaw: His organs can cause him to go unconscious and or disabled if hit in certain areas.


Samples
TDM posts (unless it's for Network), links, and examples for posts from other communities are not accepted.

Network:

So, I’m not sure what to say here, Nautilus.

All I know that Connor left you guys and he wanted me to replace him here so he could go direct the war against the Resistance.

The war needed his full attention and General Connor left behind a lot of friends and enemies I am sure.

If Connor didn’t say who I am early, my name is Marcus Wright. I’m not the same man as Connor was, but we both have different pasts.

I do care, we had a respect for each other that nobody else could fill and I gave my real beating heart to Connor so he could live on, so the Resistance could live on. Without Connor, there would be no Resistance here today.

But I’m still alive and he went back to sleep.

“Goodbye to the past, hello to the future.”





Third Person: Marcus stared down the old grave of the General, the man who he respected just enough to give his heart to. John’s pokemon cried at the gravesite while the half terminator just was quiet enough to look down in terms of respect.

The pokemon looked at Marcus with watery eyes

“Richu, RI Richu.”

(Why did you have to come and John have to leave us behind?!” He said he was going to stay with us. Why did he lie!)

Marcus wasn’t the nicest terminator around but he wasn’t as emotional as many terminators were.

“Listen.”

RI RI! RICHU!”

(No, YOU listen here. Connor was a respectful man and you AREN’T HIM.)

Marcus was losing patience with Fate not liking the terminator. The man grunts “Typical, the man teaches his pokemon to hate Terminators too.”

Kate’s Pokemon looked just as angry as John’s.

“I TOLD you John’s gone.”

Fate and Hope turn away from any hopes of reason.

Marcus bent down and sighed, showing Fate and Hope and the others the Resistance symbol.

“See this?”

They stopped.

Ri?

(Yeah?)

The Resistance lives on here, no matter if John’s here or not.

He lightly smiled, trying to calm the Pokemon down.

Sometimes even terminators have feelings too.

“Hey, Fate, Hope, your names give hope to the future. Perhaps there’s more.

A star passes over Connor’s grave as he points up.

See that, two stars are brighter tonight, guys.

“General Connor and his wife would have wanted that.”

“That Natilius had a future worth looking forward to, with or without them.”

Marcus sat Connor’s dog tags on the gravesite as he closed his eyes

“Goodbye old friend.”

The Pokemon were still uneasy as they respected Marcus considering John would.
There were red bands tied around their tiny arms as they at least were uneasy and at peace for now.

[thewakemods]

Welcome to the Wake! Please join thewake, thewakelogs, thewakeevents, thewakeooc and grant access to this journal. Reply to this comment with your character's journal, and be sure to comment on the Taken Page so we may add you. Also, once you have been granted access, please comment on the Player Contacts page as well!

Then, post on the OOC community to introduce your character!

For those of you with Plurk, please feel free to also add thewakemods!

If you like, you may also join our crack community gotosleep_idiot for lulz and memes.

Lastly, your character will wake up in the Western District.

[even_if_it_crumbles]

This is the account he will be using.

[thewakemods]

Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need several revisions.

In regards to the history section, you forgot to provide a bulleted summary of the key points to go along with the link as we requested.

We'd like you to edit the network sample to make it more clear he saw the announcement that John Conner made on the network, due to how it could be mistaken as you metagaming.

Your third person sample needs complete rewriting. Having Marcus understand Pokemon completely instead of merely inferring to what the pokemon are saying makes no sense as he doesn't have such a power in canon.

The app overall feels more like an app for Conner's Raichu rather than Marcus himself. We suggest editing this to make the focus on who you're supposed to be apping.

Also the third person sample is much too short. Only 238 words.

Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.

Marcus Wright | Terminator Salvation: Final Battle

[anewhero]

Personal Information
Name: dark
Age: 31
Personal Journal: anewhero
Email / Plurk / Discord / Other:redscribbles/ Jak/Marcus #4226
Current Character(s): General John Connor

Character Information
Character Name: Marcus Wright
Fandom: Terminator Salvation and Final Battle

Character History: You have two options for the history requirement:
https://terminator.fandom.com/wiki/Marcus_Wright

*Marcus spends his final days in prison debating his life and is quiet.

*Marcus kisses Dr. Kogan and signs away his executed body to Cyberdyne Systems for a kiss.

*Marcus dies in prison for the first time.

*Marcus’s body is carted off and made into a unique mix of terminator and human, a Terminator Hybrid and Infiltration unit. Project Angel was the project’s name run by Dr. Serena Kogan.

*15 years later- As Marcus wakes up from being revived, he finds out he’s alone and in a hellish like landscape of post apoc Los Angeles in 2018.

*Marcus runs into a few kids named Kyle Reese and Star, who by coincidence are the only survivors of the la branch of the Human Resistance.

*Marcus shows Kyle how to handle a weapon after Kyle Reese literally points it at him.

*Marcus refuses to listen to go back to Skynet territory after Kyle, Star beg him not to go, but reluctantly accept only to get captured by a giant terminator.

*Marcus finds a woman named Blair Williams, that helps him find the Human Resistance after he falls in love with her. They enjoy each others company while sitting around a fire. After fighting off survivors, they go find the Human Resistance HQ.

*Marcus steps on landmines meant for war machines and he blows up, revealing his terminator side.

*As he is revealed to be a terminator, he is strapped on a missile silo where he is shot at by Barnes and his girlfriend, Blair. He has feelings of betrayal there.

*Blair helps Marcus to escape being trapped and John and the Resistance follow. Blair is captured and interrogated and Marcus volunteers to go find Kyle Reese

*John is wary at first but allows him to find him with help. John goes with Marcus and Marcus goes to rescue Kyle and Star from the facility but ends up fighting a T-800. Marcus gets knocked out and John gets a pole shoved in his heart and survives. John revives Marcus with electricity and Marcus beats the T-800 with Kyle and John’s help.

*John is rescued along with Marcus.

*Marcus gives away his second chance and gives his human heart up*

*Marcus dies for the second time

*Marcus’s third chance begins when Skynet needs John’s help against the forces of Parnell and the bloody terminators.

*Skynet revives Marcus and Marcus’s heart can grow back via regeneration and backup systems.

Marcus is alive again and leads the Resistance while John does what he needs to do to fight Parnell’s bloody machines.

*Skynet and John make peace and end the war.

Character Personality: In reality, Marcus was a criminal on death row when he was executed by “lethal injection” due to crimes of killing his own brother and two cops, spending most of his life in prison. Everything he believed about himself in prison in his life and on the last days of his life, he thought he was worthless and nothing mattered more than people’s own harsh opinions on him as a “monster. However he had an unusual trait about him: Most criminals would be willing to defend themselves, giving excuses. Marcus believed his death was just and the value of other humans had higher worth than himself.

He was ready and willing to give up everything to die. He thought he might make people happy to get rid of him as he gave his body up to Cyberdyne System’s “Project Angel”, run by Dr. Serena Kogan.
He was then turned into a unique mix of Terminator and human better known as a T-Hybrid prototype. He was used as an infiltration unit for Skynet to kill Connor but he broke programming to save Connor’s life.

However, there is more to Marcus instead of a monster who is seen as a killer and nothing more. He had no final words to say on his execution. His own eyes reveal a man looking for another chance to live out his life in the right direction.

When someone meets Marcus, they notice his determination. He is an extremely hard worker and will push through any sense of obstacles to get to a goal. Like they say “This man can move mountains” when he pushes hard enough. He is extremely gutsy and will go above and beyond the call of duty to show his worth to someone. However, his emotions are hurt easily and usually go to an extreme at anything relating to his past especially relating to memories of his dead brother.

However, Marcus is extremely loyal to a fault and does not take betrayal well. He “takes no shit” when it comes to protecting his loved ones and allies. He’s gone to lengths such as stabbing a guy in the knee, being the first man in line to save John Connor and give up his own heart and protecting Blair with a wooden board.

When Marcus takes a leadership position in Final Battle, he is promoted when John Connor is away. He changes for the better as he’s able to lead the Resistance as a high commanding officer to help defeat a common enemy. John Connor’s respect for the common man makes Marcus, not a terminator to him but more than that. Someone who can be trusted for who he is and not for his past mistakes.

Powers and Abilities:
Marcus has regeneration abilities with his skin and his heart. It just takes something light to eat to regenerate the important parts of his body.

Marcus can also lift 2 times a regular human can.

Marcus is possibly the only terminator that can swim.

Marcus can feel pain from fire and psychological pain like a human can.

-Marcus has no idea he’s a terminator but accepts he’s more human-like than most terminators.

-Marcus’s weaknesses are that he has a major flaw: His organs can cause him to go unconscious and or he can be disabled if hit in certain areas.

Marcus can also feel Psychological pain and emotional pain.


Samples
TDM posts (unless it's for Network), links, and examples for posts from other communities are not accepted.

Network:

I didn’t fully understand the situation going on right now. All I knew was I bit my tounge as I found out General Connor and his wife Kate Connor just left. Connor wanted someone to replace him here as the war took full priority back home now.

But I looked at a mix of confusion and anger at the Connors for leaving me here, alone. I knew nobody here.
“Anybody haven’t gotten used to the network yet? I felt my headache come on as I looked over the various messages General Connor and Kate Connor had been talking about to each other and even to the others here.

All I wanted to know is “Why me?! What did I do for Connor that made me the prime candidate to replace him.”

I turned to look at my hands, turns out I was still a terminator and I still had Skynet occasionally buzzing in my head. Great.

Nothing like Skynet to make my day more miserable.

Some replacement I was.

I cleared my throat a bit and typed “If Connor didn’t say who I am early, my name is Marcus Wright. I’m not the same man as Connor was. “

I do care, we had a respect for each other that nobody else could fill.

Anyways, let’s get down to business.

“I’m assuming Connor told you guys all about terminators, am I right? Marcus frowned and looked up, touching his face, realizing there was a chunk of skin missing off his cheek and metal was showing on his face.

“I’m not going to give away my life story, but I swear I’m human, ok? It’s nothing!”

I shuddered, I don’t know how people would react to me given that I’m a terminator and not human like I like to think I am.






Third Person:

Marcus bent down, staring over the makeshift memorial he’d made for General Connor. He didn’t exactly see eye to eye with the General but he respected the man enough to give him his own cross with a Resistance band flying over it.

He bent down.

“Damnit, Connor. What the hell am I going to tell your wife? That you made a careless mistake and suddenly you are dead?!”

The human-like terminator squeezed his fists so hard, blood came dripping down.

“ARRRRRRRRRRRRRAGH!” He held his head

“Skynet didn’t win, no. Not while he was here. Fuck Skynet. “

He was forced to imagine different scenarios as to how Connor exactly didn’t see the end coming like he was supposed to.

Marcus felt like he was talking to himself, over the wind.

His pokemon were just as annoying, saying nothing but “Ri, Ri Ri.” He didn’t understand why Connor had adopted talking animals like this.

They tended to follow him wherever as well.

Must of been a comfort thing or something.

The half terminator took a few steps and then looked over his shoulder, peering back, seeing the pokemon were still there oddly enough.

It was actually starting to creep the half terminator out.

Fate seemed to hold the dirt “Riiiiii.. RI! RihiRihi.”

Marcus muttered “What the hell are you saying?!”

Once again nothing came out but sad sighing “Ri! Rihirihiachu.”

The terminator looked up at the night sky and sighed “I don’t know what I’m going to do with you two.”

Fate and Hope looked up into Marcus’s eyes all cutely and sad.

“Alright, ALRIGHT! Stop with the cute eyes! You can come with me, just no puppy eyes alright.”

The two cheered “RIII!”

Marcus just grunted and rolled his eyes.

The two pokemon wore Resistance bands. It was actually kind of cute how much of Connor they had in them.

Application

[indigomagic]

Name: Carmen
Contact: PM to this journal is preferred!
Current Character (s): N/A
Charater’s Name: Miden
Character’s Canon: Children of the Whales
Character’s Age: 16
Canon Point: Chapter 25
Background/history: N/A
Strengths:
1) Open: Miden isn’t used to people accepting him for what he is, so he’s relatively cool with other people being weird. He’ll be okay with whatever kind of crazy you can throw at him, because his crazy is probably weirder. As long as you aren’t trying to kill him, you can pretty much be Miden’s friend (because most of the new people he’s met are trying to kill him).
2) Loyal: Miden doesn’t have many friends now that people know what he is. Therefore, if you care about him, you will be everything to him. He’s desperate to find someone who accepts him, so he’ll try to make as many friends as possible. He would literally fight the world to protect his friends, and if you are foolish enough to hurt one of them, you are dead. This is pretty much what keeps him going now that he knows his demonic origins, and he’ll find a friend in anyone he can.
3) Strong-Willed: Miden can make people think he’s nearly fearless, even if he feels the exact opposite on the inside. He’s not above presenting himself very differently from who he really is, especially now that he knows what he is. Though he tries very hard to keep his origins a secret from people he doesn’t know, Miden will also try to make sure that he doesn’t lose himself trying to keep his secret. Even if he’s ready to collapse, he’ll still make it look like he’s totally confident.

Weaknesses:
1) Reserved: As an elemental, Miden knows that people who know what his origins are and what they mean won’t like him because of it (at his home, people kill daimonas like him because they think that all daimonas are evil, no matter how good their character is). Therefore, he’ll try to make sure people don’t find out if he thinks they won’t like him if they do. He might try to show off his powers discreetly, but he’ll be very careful not to let slip that he is an elemental (he’ll probably try to make it look natural). If he trusts you enough, he might reveal his origins, but he might try to almost inspect you (I promise, he is not a dog).
2) Insecure: Though Miden might be very good at presenting himself as practically invincible, he definitely isn’t. He’s good at pretending to be confident, but not so good at actually being confident. He’s also terrified of being rejected by people, terrified of hurting people with his powers if they go out of control, and terrified that his abilities will be used as a weapon.
3) Awkward: Though he tries to be strong, Miden actually has the people skills of a rock. He doesn’t know how to handle social situations well, and he’s embarrassed when people are too nice (in his opinion). Or they just weird him out. This also puts a wall up between Miden and his friends, and he can come off as shy or distant.
Powers/Abilities:
—As daimonas, Miden can use thymia (a.k.a, basically carry out telekinesis). His aura will appear by an object (or person) and he can move that object or person at will.
—Miden can also use the aura as a shield if it isn’t attached to an object, and break things.
Other Noteworthy Traits: He’s very easy to manipulate.
Weapons and other Special Inventory:
The clothes on his back (including a cloak).
Staff (extra)
Color: Blue, because it’s the color of his (normal) thymia and markings.
World Aspect: N/A. I’ll weave a few into plots.
TDM: N/A

[thewakemods]

Hello and thank you for your interest in the Wake!

Unfortunately we will not be able to accept this application due to the fact that it does not follow the preset format we have for this game.

If you are new to DWRP, welcome! When you wish to join a game, you must follow the instructions and use the form the mods of that game provide. The only exception to this is if you are joining an appless game or simply doing memes/psls with others.

You are free to try again using the form we provide on this post. Just copy and paste and then fill it out the best you can.

Please let us know if you have any questions. Thank you for your understanding.

Application revisions

[indigomagic]

Name: Carmen Age: 14 Journal: Indigomagic Email: carbookworm@icloud.com Current Character (s): N/A Charater’s Name: Miden Fandom: Children of the Whales History: Miden is a daimonas (a.k.a, an artificial person), so he doesn’t have a home or a family. He was created by Dyo, so he calls her his mother even though he doesn’t have an actual mother. When he was ten, Dyo started using Miden as an executioner because of his powers and she molded him into a puppet. Personality: Miden obeys Dyo’s every order, and he doesn’t have much of his own personality in canon. However, he will be able to think for himself once he wakes up. Powers/Abilities: —As a “Marked,” Miden can use thymia (a.k.a, basically carry out telekinesis). His aura will appear by an object (or person) and he can move that object or person at will. —Miden can also use the aura as a shield if it isn’t attached to an object, and break things. Sample: https://awashlogs.dreamwidth.org/469.html#comments https://worlds.dreamwidth.org https://worlds.dreamwidth.org/1572.html#comments

Re: Application revisions

[indigomagic]

Ignore this!

Re: Application revisions

[indigomagic]

Name: Carmen
Age: 14
Journal: Indigomagic
Email: carbookworm@icloud.com
Current Character (s): N/A
Charater’s Name: Miden
Fandom: Children of the Whales
History: Miden is a daimonas (a.k.a, an artificial person), so he doesn’t have a home or a family. He was created by Dyo, so he calls her his mother even though he doesn’t have an actual mother. When he was ten, Dyo started using Miden as an executioner because of his powers and she molded him into a puppet.
Personality: Miden obeys Dyo’s every order, and he doesn’t have much of his own personality in canon. However, he will be able to think for himself once he wakes up.
Powers/Abilities:
—As a “Marked,” Miden can use thymia (a.k.a, basically carry out telekinesis). His aura will appear by an object (or person) and he can move that object or person at will.
—Miden can also use the aura as a shield if it isn’t attached to an object, and break things.
Sample: https://awashlogs.dreamwidth.org/469.html#comments
https://worlds.dreamwidth.org
https://worlds.dreamwidth.org/1572.html#comments

Re: Application revisions

[indigomagic]

This is the first thing I’ve done here, so the TDM probably won’t come up with much.

[thewakemods]

We cannot accept this either. When we said you could copy and paste, we were talking about our preset form, not your previous app.

See here? On the page has boxes containing the forms you need to app in a character into the Wake. Hold down the mouse in one of the boxes and move it all the way down until you have all the text highlighted, right click and copy it. Then paste it into either a word document or google doc to fill out.

Please use the first one as you are trying to app in a character from an existing fandom.

[thewakemods]

Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need several revisions.

The network sample is now written very strangely as if a narrator is narrating rather than Marcus himself talking. When we asked to alter it to make it more clear that he had read the announcement on the network, we meant more as him perhaps saying "I saw that announcement post John Conner posted on the network a while back." Though if it's not IC for him to research the network before making a post himself on the network, then he shouldn't be able to have this knowledge. IC knowledge does not equal OOC knowledge after all.

Your third person sample is way too spaced out where they are merely just seperate sentences. Please alter them into proper paragraphs. Also it's still too short as it's only 291 words.

Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.

Application

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The Crystal Exarch | Final Fantasy 14

[rewritten_history]

The future is where his destiny awaits.

Marcus Wright | Terminator Salvation: Final Battle

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What makes us human

[thewakemods]

Unfortunately we will have to reject this due to having been over a month since we last asked for revisions. To quote this post, "If we request revisions for your application, you have one week to submit those revisions."

You are free to re-submit the app, but updated with these revisions.

Thank you for your understanding.

[thewakemods]

Hello, and thank you for your interest in The Wake! Before we consider your application for approval, we'll need a minor revision. In regards to the history section, you forgot to provide a bulleted summary of the key points to go along with the link as we requested.

Please let us know if you have any questions, and we look forward to your revisions.

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Oops. Updated!